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Undead Regrets #2

Author: Linkins_knot
ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer
Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 20 /46 /19
Words: 192
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
Total Views: 942
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Undead Regrets #2

Good Morning
I hope you’re ready for some mourning
Your gonna be crying for a while
Giving everyone a big smile
Grab your skin with torque
Use my hands as a fork
Peel it all off
While you sit there like a lazy sloth
Give you all the terror and pain
All the pain I was left to gain
You can run, but you can’t hide
All you’re doing is destroying all your pride
Once I find you
There will be a lot of people that will miss you
I watch you at night
But you don’t look out, because you don’t want fright
I watch you slit yours wrists
Your thoughts thinking about trying not to miss
Accidentally kill yourself, wondering why
While your waiting to die
I’ll be watching blissfully
While you’re filled with negativity
The Grim Reaper is coming soon to strike
With his giant knife, his Scythe
Slash through your head
Making your body forever asleep in a bed
Until your body rots and decays
Your dreams and nightmare about my devious ways
I’m deciding whose next
To see who will have there last breath, last flex…

Submitted on 2006-04-27 15:28:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really liked your raw emotion and the anger i want to hate too but i dont have the guts to do so
| Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by manymoodsofme | [ Reply to This ]
  hey back again!!! i like it!! kinda took me back 2 jr high and all da bull[censored] that happened but thats ok!! there were some parts were the flow kinda left but thats ok!! i still liked it!! good job!~akaila~
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  seems a little rough but nothing thats not easily fixable. iliked it... i thought a few places such as "Accidentally kill yourself, wondering why
While your waiting to die" sounded like they could rhyme better.
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  nice and simple, but i liked it. Reminds me of stuff i did in my sophmore year though.
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by Silenced poet | [ Reply to This ]

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