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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye Grandmotherdots
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    Author: Soph
    ASL Info:    21/f/where I'm loved
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 55/54/13
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 175
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 757



    Description:
       To my grandma, who left me two years ago to Heaven.


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    dotsGoodbye Grandmotherdots
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    The sun shines upon my window
    Making me shelter my eyes
    Thinking of you, I think “How?”
    How could you say, your final goodbyes.

    We shall speak once more
    Of that I’m sure
    Today I close the door
    And suffer. For my pain there’s no cure.

    You were more to me than anyone
    You cared for me like a mother
    Having you around was so much fun
    For me there’s no other.

    I think of you everyday
    Never could stay away
    Every time I pray
    You’re there, in my prayers, everyday

    Goodbye you said two years ago
    I still say it was a crime
    Goodbye to the hugs and kisses of long ago
    Goodbye for the last time




    Submitted on 2006-04-27 21:16:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you touched my soul thank you for writeing this
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is soulfully written and drenched with sadness. Writing these words must have proven to be a cathartic release of pent up emotion.

    Piteously so, life is not forEVER and oft times, we have to say "Good bye!"

    Soph, you have captured the agony of farewell so wonderfully in these verses. The pathos is well portrayed!

    Deanna xx

    (Sorry for your loss!)
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by Deanna More | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad
    I really loved this write
    My Grandmother God rest her soul was the most beautiful and caring person I ever had in my life
    I called her MeMa
    On my right arm is a tattoo that says Mema
    Evrerytime I see It I immediately am drawn back to the Love she gave me for so Long
    You captured the theme to this write perfectly
    And this write definately carries a lot of emotion
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron

    I will be Praying for you and your Grandma
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a fair amount of good elements in it, but the rhyme feels forced, you should have let this run free verse or restructured it., well that is just me
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      This was depressingly enjoyable [I am using this phrase too much]. Although my Grandmothers are still present in this world, I do understand what you are saying this this. The bond between her and myself is very strong. You well-established the aim you wished to accomplish in this write. The rhymes felt a little forced

    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]



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