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Submission Name: Dillemma dots

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Author:	submarine
Elite Ratio:	2.42 - 119/89/40
Words:	102

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	199
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	630

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be honest... please.

Dillemma dots

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Days became weeks,
Weeks turned to months
And months have turned to years,
Though time has gone by
Your still on my mind.

I dont want you in my thoughts
And i cant get you out,
I dont want to remember
And i cant seem to forget.
I think of you more now
Than i used to before.

Your the wound i care for most
But the pain just grows.
My mind wants other things
But my heart wants you.
I'm too weak,
Cant fight you anymore,
So i'll let you be,
And this dillemma i have to live with.

Submitted on 2006-04-28 02:33:13 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  its lovely and tortured. i can relate

i really like this line "So i'll let you be,
And this dillemma i have to live with"
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by emb_er77 | [ Reply to This ]
  StankieFrankie says "ditto" to Scribner. A great show of the lingering emotions of attachment. And yes, this must be a common thread between the diverse human experience. And as for this your writing, StankieFrankie approves!
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by StankieFrankie | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes- I lyke that lyne, particularly, too...
Thys was very simply straightforward and to the point with no mist of 'art' surrounding it and it makes it hit so much harder. It's raw. It has no skin. (these are compliments)

Change the couple "your" to 'you're' because that's what you mean. And then it is perfect in my opinion.

Keep up the great work, and remember::: Your mynd just contains the thoughts- it’s your heart that feels the pain.

!Mr. Beck!
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Maguir3_B3ck | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good. I think we have all been in this place. And those who haven't, hold on it's coming:) Nice write. I really like the line:
You're the wound I care for most.
Very good. Keep it up.
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]

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