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    dots Submission Name: Breathless Phoneticsdots
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    Author: Maguir3_B3ck
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 33/39/24
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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       Strange are the gifts one may be givenÖ


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    dotsBreathless Phoneticsdots
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    Itís too much
    ~it hurts~
    Iím keeping it simple
    (no) I donít want to eXplain
    Donít want to hear whatís ďsaneĒ
    I donít want to hear
    ~the same~
    Fucking excuses
    Tired of the tired ill justifications
    The same old rational explanations

    Phonetically; yoo suk
    I just want to fuck you
    I just caught you cheating
    And I just want to love you

    Congratulations

    -on your intricate handiwork

    You gave me thys fetish
    ~and you made sure it took~
    -No questions asked because
    (yes) Iím all over you
    Now, I kno itís not right for you
    to be so untrue
    ~But in every single instance~
    It seems just what you should do
    Just what I will doÖ

    Phonetically; yoo suk
    I just want to fuck you

    But where do your
    infidelities
    leave me mentally?

    -hadd to learn to lyke it

    Iím sorry,

    breathingís not an optionÖ




    Submitted on 2006-04-28 03:32:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      God the flow of this was awesome ...I just bumbled right through it and then read it again ...Reading this is almost like having your mind pulled along the words ...
    I love the quirky little blemishes in there ...the ~'s ..and the (yes) ....ect ect ...
    You truly have a natural gift for making a poem read as it should ....there is never any doubt in my mind about how your stuff should be read...because you don't need to think about it ...It all just flows how it's meant to...

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    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]


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