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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 1073
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Down on the sands
    in the heat
    of the sun
    I watch
    as I see
    awkward young teens
    in too tight tops
    showing breasts
    that are buds
    that are straining
    the fabric
    blossoming tips
    of hard, perky breasts
    as they rub
    down their skin
    trying to look
    like they aren't trying
    to seduce with
    the insecurity of innocence
    to retain
    the stirring they feel
    drinking beer
    from their male elders
    with hungry eyes
    that take the girls
    and chew them up
    like wolves
    denfenseless innocence
    drinking the juice
    of their rebellion
    as they lie and they try
    to think about
    somethin other than
    the racing of
    their hormonal hearts

    Submitted on 2006-04-28 07:10:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was prepared to hear about awkward young teens; I heard about young girls in a fight to attract men instead. A writing inspired by a trip to the beach, no doubt! However, the condition of culture's "freedoms" paired with raging teenage hormones was addressed well, but it seemed as if the condition addressed effected our writer enough to make it the subject of focus. Still, stankiefrankie gives this one a thumb up!
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by StankieFrankie | [ Reply to This ]

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