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    dots Submission Name: Contradictionsdots
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    Author: Maguir3_B3ck
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 33/39/24
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 978
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Seems simple enough... It's all I ask, really.


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    dotsContradictionsdots
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    Say what you mean and
    do what you say
    Don’t floor me out of
    East Jesus on a cloudy day
    because:::
    If it comes out of your mouth
    then it should happen that way

    ~Is it so hard to stick to your story?
    I say “story” for it was not tru
    Is it so hard to not change your mynd

    (for once)
    or is changing your mynd just what you do?

    Speak what you think and
    only think what is right
    Don’t come out of nowhere
    lyke a ded boi at night
    because:::
    The words you use are blinders
    and they hinder my sight

    ~Now, I’ve got a little “story” for you
    I say ‘story’ since it’s full of lies
    It’s about how I’ll never leave you

    (I’m laughing)
    and how your words have deafened me so
    I won’t hear your cries…







    Submitted on 2006-04-28 14:19:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      First off, welcome to Elite. I enjoyed this poem. Maybe because I seek for honesty with all that around me as well. This was well worded and I liked the flow. Blunt and still creative with imagery. I liked this alot.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Speak what you think and
    only think what is right
    Don’t come out of nowhere
    lyke a dumb boi at night
    because:::
    The words you use are blinders
    and they hinder my sight


    I have some problems with that. Just the 'dumb boy at night' thing kind of comes out of nowhere. (Like acne.)

    The other thing is my personal hatred of spelling errors and people who think changing the spelling of words is TEH KEWLZ ZOMG!!1!1!11

    Really though, this is good and I think you should write more so I can read it, yo yo yo.

    Yo yo, yo yo yo.
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Shuurinakisame | [ Reply to This ]


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