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    dots Submission Name: Let It Rain Some Other Daydots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 300
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLet It Rain Some Other Daydots
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    It might rain...
    The clouds are gray,
    Ten months this May.
    but still only a spring day.
    Her eyes closed,
    Mine stare astray.
    off to the clouds of gray.
    it might rain...
    So before the skies bleed,
    I'll lay to sleep.
    Nocturnal suicide is a new seed,
    one that I plan to keep.


    When all I know is somnelence in open eyes,
    drowsy clouds of silver and eye-rubbing insomnia,
    my unprepared cries.

    To react,
    In time let the flame succumb before sleep.
    So there's a little peace.
    With no awareness,
    sleep is my final caprice.
    besides this is too abstract.
    In words this is all I have to keep.
    for when I awake,
    You'll be the one I take.

    The first touch,
    many times said,
    heart-ache.
    Second hand lies,
    You're so porcelain you're fake.

    It's the same every day.
    Your lips interlocked around his,
    your tounge slithering about one another.
    Your arms curess his hip,
    Your teeth bite his lip.
    So hope, with these drugs.
    I might black out to a death trip.


    The last time.
    I witnessed sunshine.
    Before I peered over the lovely edge of "loves" shadowy design.
    Taking a leep, no hands of the divine.
    In plastic dreams I choose to prey,
    upon significant-others,
    dying behind shattered mirrors.
    Quivering in my arms like a ceasing hope,
    withering away,
    So here I say" it's okay.. I'm fine,"
    "I just need time, besides it's going to rain"


    "Take away the pain..."
    The clouds are gray,
    Ten months this May.
    but still only a spring day.
    Her eyes closed,
    Mine stare astray.
    off to the clouds of gray.
    So before the skies bleed,
    I'll lay to sleep.
    Nocturnal suicide is a new seed,
    one that I plan to keep.




    Submitted on 2006-04-28 19:58:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Beautiful and creative wording. Good imagery. I was not certain of the theme here. I did not know if the person was missing someone she loved or was just depressed. Your could use a little more work. I enjoyed reading this. I just feel bad because I was clueless to what you meant by this poem.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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