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    dots Submission Name: Emotionsdots
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    Author: Soph
    ASL Info:    21/f/where I'm loved
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 55/54/13
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 738



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    Paper as white as my wall,
    What shall I scribble on you?
    Like a drenching waterfall,
    I pour my emotions into you.

    Smooth like a cup of tea
    Powerful as a cold, stinging rain
    All I need to be me,
    Is to write out my pain

    Soft and sweet,
    Like a first kiss.
    When will we meet?
    For it’s you, whom I miss

    Hot headed rage
    What am I to do?
    Just turn the page,
    To page twenty two

    Tears, like drops of rain
    Fall on your page
    I’m not in pain
    Just beating against my cage

    Joyously I end
    As the sun comes out
    Goodbye my friend
    Goodbye! I shout




    Submitted on 2006-04-28 21:10:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a nice piece i found it to be one of longing almost yearning as it says in this stanza

    "Soft and sweet,
    Like a first kiss.
    When will we meet?
    For it’s you, whom I miss"

    the feeling of know exactly who you want in your life yet waiting for them to arrive is something i can associate with very much so well written i feel your emotion in this one thank you
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      good flow, good word choices, passable visualization, it is a decent read, but when I finish, I find myself asking 'what is this misssing?'
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]



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