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    dots Submission Name: im yelling but im sorrydots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsim yelling but im sorrydots
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    finally a new day
    after years and years of angry nothing
    scream, yell, repeat
    sorry it took me so long to be sorry

    i admitted i was wrong because i was and that should be enough
    cause theres nothing else i can do now
    its been over for years now
    what can i do NOW?

    you had to push this
    like i didnt feel bad
    like you think i apologized for nothing
    now im not feeling so damn sorry

    back off, and just accept the apology!
    see youve got me yelling again
    and all i came to say was
    im sorry




    Submitted on 2006-04-29 02:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There are two strong lines in this piece; one found in the first section and the other in the last. The poem reads like this "...sorry it took so long to be sorry...see youve got me yelling again..." Those lines STUCK in a good way, the rest well...(smile)reads just like the persona was speaking to me and in defense I tuned it out (same ole, same ole excuses). The feelings expressed came across as identifiable and real. Also the repetion in "sorry it took so long to be sorry" sounds perfect. The other uses of repetion like "now" in lines 7 and 8 come across as an uncontrollable rant. Hope this feedback is received in the manner in which it was intended.
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by my turtle | [ Reply to This ]


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