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    dots Submission Name: Is this Love?dots
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    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1072
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       Just started writing this the other day.


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    dotsIs this Love?dots
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    I saw you this day
    Looking as beautiful as ever
    I only wish that you would
    Be with me forever.

    I can't remember the first time
    I saw you, not even where
    But since then I've been captivated
    My mind wanders everywhere.

    I can't figure out just why
    I keep thinking about you
    You and I have never spoken
    And the times I see you are few.

    Is this what people call love?
    Or just some crazy feeling?
    Am I head over heels?
    Because I try, but I ain't walking.




    Submitted on 2006-04-29 08:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was nice. You started off good, and seem to lose steam as the poem draws to a end. You flow was good. But the rhyming seemed to be off or forced in certain places. I liked the idea of how one can fall in love with the image of a person because they are just that awesome or beautiful. Overall, this was good.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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