Is this Love? by Roberto Santos

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Author:	Roberto Santos
ASL Info:	18/Male/India
Elite Ratio:	2.96 - 118/159/75
Words:	93

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1111
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Just started writing this the other day.

Is this Love? dots

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I saw you this day
Looking as beautiful as ever
I only wish that you would
Be with me forever.

I can't remember the first time
I saw you, not even where
But since then I've been captivated
My mind wanders everywhere.

I can't figure out just why
I keep thinking about you
You and I have never spoken
And the times I see you are few.

Is this what people call love?
Or just some crazy feeling?
Am I head over heels?
Because I try, but I ain't walking.

Submitted on 2006-04-29 08:25:55 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This was nice. You started off good, and seem to lose steam as the poem draws to a end. You flow was good. But the rhyming seemed to be off or forced in certain places. I liked the idea of how one can fall in love with the image of a person because they are just that awesome or beautiful. Overall, this was good.

Catrina
| Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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