Something about us

Author: Tom110989 Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 35 /56 /21 Words: 58

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Something about us

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Something about us She is I am We are Different Not the same We run We hide Our thoughts Our dreams Everything Nothing We talk We laugh In silence A promise A memory A past Her life My life Two roads A beginning An ending Closer Further Never gone Never together

Submitted on 2006-04-29 13:45:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The main thing I liked about this one was that it was very brief and yet you managed to say a lot. (I know that EVERYONE has said that, but its commendable). This is a very kind dedication to a friend who you really seem to care about. I liked your style of writing in this one, and look forward to reading some more of your work. Out of 5, I give this a 4 Abbas

| Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

Good poem, used little words but said alot. who is this poem written for? it shows alot and the compare and constrast to every stanza. what is the topic of the poem, u should add a desprition telling whats the purpose of the poem. keep working on it and if u get a chance please look @ some of my work. my newest poem is called L.O.V.E. diamond

| Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Qutedia7 | [ Reply to This ]

I really liked this. You said so much by using hardly any words at all. I applaud you for such good work shown here. I liked the poem, because you showed how bothof yourlives are one yet, you both are your own person. Great work! Catrina

| Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

Hi tom, I like the approach u've taken to describe feelings in a shorthand manner....it is appealing! I think the way u've put a thought, then broken it down, showing that there is a lot but yet something lacks, its fantastic. its something shakespeare used in hamlet! Anyway keep writing, more often, and do temme about this friend of yours Cheers man Mihir

| Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by mihir | [ Reply to This ]

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