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twisted logical sense

Author: Roula
ASL Info:    18/female
Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46 /64 /45
Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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twisted logical sense

You are the reson why
shy seems sober
and words go mute.

I'm fustrated in fragile thoughts
not knowing where to place them.
Secondhand words wont do me any good.

I'm torn
split in two.
Deception twists logical sense.

Pity will guide your expectations
until you lose defense.

Submitted on 2006-04-29 19:41:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I *really* like the first stanza of this, very very nice. Need to fix the typos in this but other than that, very nicely done very moving without being cliché.
| Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by ziska | [ Reply to This ]
  lol, okay I want to point something out real quick and it may be something really retarded to point out, but it just amuses me. In your picture, you're all smiling and happy, like you have a perfect life...but in the two writings I've read from you, they were both sad and depressing. lol, it may just be me, but for some odd reason I find that funny.
Anyway, This was a nice write. Nothing wrong with it as far as I can tell. My favorite part was "Secondhand words wont do me any good". I likedthat a lot for some reason. To me, it sounds like people have been telling you things that someone else least that's what I get out of it.
Anyway, nice write.

Peace....for now or later
| Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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