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    dots Submission Name: Remember...dots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsRemember...dots
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    Fire's burning in the background
    Still can hear the sound
    of the baby crying

    Daddy's sitting in the back room
    He dont have a clue
    about whats going on

    My life flashed before me
    Im longing and yearning
    to grasp it all

    If I can just remember what life was like
    before I lost it all
    If I can just picture life before this hospital

    Suddenly it hits me, my futures over
    Its like Ive spent all my life in acoma

    Somebody tell me something, anything
    I wanna cry, i wanna feel you
    But as I lie here horizontal

    I just wanna remember what life was like
    before I lost it all
    If I can just picture life before this hospital
    Then it hits me, my futures over
    oh, oh, oh life in acoma

    to be continued...




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