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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: metalman_21
    ASL Info:    17/m/NE
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 30/42/17
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 756
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1129



    Description:
       Hey guys. It's been awhile since my last post so I thought it was about time I did something. This is a free verse poem about my view on love. I feel it's pretty deep, but I'm open to criticisim if you're willing. Please post comments.

    -Chris C.


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    dotsLovedots
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    Where would we be without love?/
    We would all be the same.
    Every one of us, a clone.
    The subservient pawns of a higher power.
    A servent of one single purpose.
    To live, and Die./

    Who woud we be without love?/
    Shells, empty and hollow.
    Out human bodies would bear no difference,
    to the rigid outer tissue of the frost ridden nut.
    We could be murderous.
    Free and happy of legal reprocussions,
    if we kill others that have no strong connections.
    I.E.: Love/

    Why do we love?/
    The answer is simple.
    To feel alive.
    To have your own purpose,
    and not have to live by fate.
    To feel like you are your own person.
    The feel wanted,
    Nigh, NEEDED,
    in a world which casts you aside.

    When will we love?/
    Only time will tell, my friends,
    for love is not bound by time or space.
    It is not shackeled by labels, or stereotypes.
    It is only free.
    Free as the western wind on a fresh spring day.
    And so it shall remain.




    Submitted on 2006-04-29 22:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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