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The Rose and the Hatchet


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 161
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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The Rose and the Hatchet



It’s a tale between
Romeo and Juliet,
Love and death,
The rose and the hatchet

Forbidden love
Because of a name
Her twisted life
Will never be the same

And they both stood
At god’s door, and asked why
For once last time
Why does he defy

Her man of the hour,
The man of her days
He turned to her and said
“I love you in so many ways”

She turned to him
And through teary eyes
Hugged him and whispered
“True love never dies”

The rain fell down.
An hour before dead
They held each other close
“I love you” was all that was said

Time hit midnight they held their knives
About to commit the perfect crime
And they kissed each other
For one last time

When the twelfth bell rang
Through the streets echoed a cry
The hardest way to love
But the best way to die




Submitted on 2006-04-29 23:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  If this poem is about Romeo and Juliet... that's not quite what happened. (Romeo killed himself because he though Juliet was already dead.)

I'll assume that it isn't based on the play, and I'll say - although a little corny, beautiful nonetheless. Rhyming a little forced perhaps.

I love the last verse; a beautiful way to end the poem!
| Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by Lulu La Feyne | [ Reply to This ]


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