Solitude

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 118

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Solitude

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Who knew quietness Could be so painful When did the memories Start to hurt so bad My skin feels cold In this summer day breeze, Haven’t been held in so long My heart feels unloved Who knew being in love Could feel so lonely When ever did my life Turn so dull Sounds of your voice Fading out in my head It’s been so long I almost forget your face… Who knew being alone Could put feelings on ice When did speaking Become so hard The peace Has cursed the alone Days crawl by like years Seems forever since I’ve seen you Solitude… The slow way of dying

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The first two lines of this captured my attention 'Who knew being in love could feel so lonely' This line also I thought to be very significant in the words. The only thing that I didn't really like is the last two lines, I think the line 'seems forever since I've seen you' would have made a better ending - the reference to dying was quite a surprise and I didn't think it fitted somehow?... just a thought, anyway. I enjoyed reading this it was good Take care Debbie

| Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by cerberus74 | [ Reply to This ]

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