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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
Total Views: 1156
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Who knew quietness
Could be so painful
When did the memories
Start to hurt so bad

My skin feels cold
In this summer day breeze,
Haven’t been held in so long
My heart feels unloved

Who knew being in love
Could feel so lonely
When ever did my life
Turn so dull

Sounds of your voice
Fading out in my head
It’s been so long
I almost forget your face…

Who knew being alone
Could put feelings on ice
When did speaking
Become so hard

The peace
Has cursed the alone
Days crawl by like years
Seems forever since I’ve seen you


The slow way of dying

Submitted on 2006-04-29 23:41:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The first two lines of this captured my attention

'Who knew being in love could feel so lonely'

This line also I thought to be very significant in the words. The only thing that I didn't really like is the last two lines, I think the line 'seems forever since I've seen you' would have made a better ending - the reference to dying was quite a surprise and I didn't think it fitted somehow?... just a thought, anyway. I enjoyed reading this it was good

Take care
| Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by cerberus74 | [ Reply to This ]

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