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At Night She Cries


Author: poetry chica
ASL Info:    17/f/usa
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Words: 221
Class/Type: Lyrics /Broken
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i know this is pretty crappy but it kinda just came to me so idk if you hate it then don't be afraid to say so


At Night She Cries



She thought he'd always care
Always hold her close
She believed his promise to forever be there
Shows how much she knows
He left her there without a warning
Standing there in the dawn's pale light
He left her there that October morning
She let him go without a fight

(But at night she cries)
Hurt me if it heals you
Kill me if it makes you smile
Hit me if it feels good
Drag me for a thousand miles
I'd do anything to make you happy
I gave up everything i had
But all you did was leave me
Alone here, broken and sad

He broke her heart
And left her lonely
She tried to get a fresh start
But could think of him only
She cries herself to sleep at night
Wishing he'd come home to her
He's the one that held her close and chased away her fright
Now without him she's scared, rooted to the floor

(And at night she cries)
Hurt me if it heals you
Kill me if it makes you smile
Hit me if it feels good
Drag me for a thousand miles
I'd do anything to make you happy
I gave up everything i had
But all you did was leave me
Alone here, broken and sad




Submitted on 2006-04-30 00:15:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was poem was filled with great expressive lines. Deep and romantic. But at the same time i have an opinion. i disagree with what this write says about love. No one should go through pain or suffer immensely for someone they love. its just doesnt make sense. But its just my opinion and i know their are exceptions soo i will stop here. it was a good read..

THanks
SInceerly
| Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hm..I really liked this piece.Very sad, and heart breaking. I have a poem somewhat like this, havn't posted it yet..don't think I will..A bit too private for me, but anywho I know how it feels to love someone so much, and you would do anything just to see them smile, even it involves hurting yourself in return..been there..crying over a person isn't the best way to get over them, believe me I know..You just need to not think about it as much, because apprently this 'guy' didn't love you as much as you adored him..You deserve better!

Anywho this isn't about the poem, but I couldn't help but to be attracted to your icon..A cut up wrist, eh?..interesting..Not the best of addictions me dear..

Anywho keep up the great work, hope to read more of your pieces when I have the time!Take care!

Lucy^_^
| Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
  It's a very nice romantic poem, and I think it's beauty comes from the sadness it expresses. It's like an ongoing sad-ending. A teen with a broken heart- a condition for growing up. I would say the poem's structure is good, I'd only advice you watch the rythm a bit. In some parts it doesn't roll very well with the tongue. Other than that, it's just a beautiful poem I enjoyed reading.
| Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by Erik | [ Reply to This ]


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