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    dots Submission Name: SLEEPdots

    Author: Krankheit
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ma
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 2/6/6
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       I wrote this last night when I was very tired. I wanted to write something. So I just wrote about sleep and let whatever I was think about it, while very tired.

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    My eyes are drifting
    the only thing keeping them in
    are my eye lids? my lids
    my sockets are sore. overused
    Blinking fells good. real good
    Though I open them up again
    and I am back where I started


    I could be sleeping
    It is an option. A very tempting one
    but I reject it. I don't know why
    Ther is always some other meaningless task
    I'm just in denial.
    still am in denial


    I need sleep I'm going to sleep.
    when am I going to sleep?
    Hopefully it will be soon
    I'm not even looking
    I'm sleeping with my eyes open
    and writing with them closed.


    Submitted on 2006-04-30 10:34:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the format of this piece and how the last sleep is italicized as if you have fallen asleep. you definitely rambled on a bit in this piece but it only added to the "sleepiness" tone of it. the part where you said the only thing holding in your eyes were your eyelids made me laugh out loud. i actually pictured your eyes trying to pop out. you use really strong imagery and i enjoy that. this was fun. continue writing.

    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by Sacred Sindy | [ Reply to This ]

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