Description: I wrote this last night when I was very tired. I wanted to write something. So I just wrote about sleep and let whatever I was think about it, while very tired.
SLEEP -------------------------------------------
My eyes are drifting
the only thing keeping them in
are my eye lids? my lids
my sockets are sore. overused
Blinking fells good. real good
Though I open them up again
and I am back where I started
SLEEP
I could be sleeping
It is an option. A very tempting one
but I reject it. I don't know why
Ther is always some other meaningless task
I'm just in denial.
still am in denial
SLEEP
I need sleep I'm going to sleep.
when am I going to sleep?
Hopefully it will be soon
I'm not even looking
I'm sleeping with my eyes open
and writing with them closed.
I like the format of this piece and how the last sleep is italicized as if you have fallen asleep. you definitely rambled on a bit in this piece but it only added to the "sleepiness" tone of it. the part where you said the only thing holding in your eyes were your eyelids made me laugh out loud. i actually pictured your eyes trying to pop out. you use really strong imagery and i enjoy that. this was fun. continue writing.
Submission Name: SLEEP
