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    dots Submission Name: Gone Foreverdots
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    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1277
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    Description:
       I sometimes act as if what has happens doesn't affect or concern me in the least, but it does, it hurts deep inside.


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    dotsGone Foreverdots
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    I don't know why
    I desire you so today
    Is it because you have
    Forever gone away?

    The heart always wants
    The one thing it cannot get
    Since you are beyond me
    Upon you my heart is set.

    Fate is very cruel
    As I now clearly see
    Of your tender affections
    I am not worthy.

    I want you now only
    Because you'll never be mine
    These cursed desires rob me
    Of any peace I find.

    I have become a wretch
    With no honour or value
    A worthless lonely being
    Grieving the loss of you.




    Submitted on 2006-04-30 10:46:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      love....
    i personally think is a terrible subject. but we all write about it including me.
    its sad and im sorry, and i some what agree with poetry chica.
    i ususually dont like rhyme and stuff like this, but it all adds up and its ok.
    keep writing.
    -BleedingTears
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      very sad. we all long to have what is just out of our reach. things seem so close but when you reach for them you find that they are a mile away. none of us feel worthy at time but it's almost always something that we can change if we try or if we truly desire to...overall i thought this was a very good write. keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]


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