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    dots Submission Name: Live Love Lifedots

    Author: Toxic Rose
    Elite Ratio:    5.82 - 159/220/97
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLive Love Lifedots

    I woke up today
    After a strange, strange dream
    When a young girl told me
    Of all this world could be
    If people would surrender
    To their wildest hopes and dreams-
    Just picture what it would be like
    If we multiplied our delights

    I'll sing a song just to hear the music
    Cherishing the sound, I pray I'll never lose it
    I stand on the rooftop, watching the edge of night
    My hope wavering, as fragile as the fading light
    This high note trills through the shivering air
    Gliding through the breeze, without a care
    I can be that note, if only for today
    I can float past my troubles and pave my own way-
    Living, loving, cherishing life
    'Cause fortune's a balance on the edge of a knife.

    Submitted on 2006-04-30 20:07:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ooo..... lucy likeys this. Am I allowed to say that? :-) Its really... interesting. In a very good way you see... The first part about the dream....dreams can really affect me, how about you? "watching the edge of night" that is a really beautiful thought.... "Cause fortune's a balance on the edge of a knife." Niiicee... it's like... fortune is that little chance you don't fall over and get sliced in half! Haha! Wow...amazing visual.... :-O
    This was a really nice read, Toxic Rose.
    Peace, Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty much the best type of surrender you can have~to surrender to your wildest hopes and dreams
    I'm guessing this is your dream? Or perhaps other people's dreams (referring to second body)
    It seems that something special comes from music and one note stands out more than the rest~Able to be carefree and surpassing the difficulties of life. you hope to cherish and hold onto it as the night slips away.
    The last line is good..."fortune" do you mean luck and goodness? or money and successfullness? Whichever one, how you describe it as "..on the edge of a knife" is deep. One step this way or that ur off the knife completely (perhaps the knife denotes the pathway to a good life) or stepping too hard in one place and you may get hurt.
    Nicely written
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by Perpetualdreamz | [ Reply to This ]

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