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    dots Submission Name: The Curedots
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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1047
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 437



    Description:
       Its when you break up with someone but yo still love them.. Dammit


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    dotsThe Curedots
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    So what i wrote this for you?
    You know what maybe you should just leave.
    I never really loved you anyway.
    It wasnt supposed to be this way.
    You Know?
    Maybe ill just move to another part of town.
    You were the last good thing about me.
    Maybe I do cry.
    Maybe its not goodbye.
    I hate you.
    I will never forget that night.
    Just leave.







    Submitted on 2006-05-01 00:37:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hate break ups. Wish more people would have commented on this piece. I hate it when a piece goes without some kind of comment. I dont want to critique this because it's a touchy subject. I just want to say I'm terribly sorry that this happened to you.

    BCute

    Don't feel the need to comment on my work I'm trying to get to +30 I'd taken a leave from the site for a while and now I'm back to get my reciprocation up. So, don't feel like you have to comment back. I'm just doing everyone a favor. Thanks for the read!
    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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