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something more


Author: brokenmirror
ASL Info:    150/f/duiuwy89
Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 46 /71 /29
Words: 52
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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not done...


something more



dismantled
please just tear me down
hopeless
i'm all yours now
tired
there's nothing else to do
waiting
for something more than you

unsatisfied
with what i have to show
wanting
something i do not know
realizing
that you are all i got
loving
is something i forgot






Submitted on 2006-05-01 00:40:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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