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    dots Submission Name: Bitter Lovedots
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    Author: theworldsucks
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1692



    Description:
       ......... WHY MEEEEEEEEEE
    (reveling in teen angst.)


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    dotsBitter Lovedots
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    I’d hate to sound cliché
    I’m sure you hear it every day
    On the radio
    Playing sweet and low
    In a sweet, low voice I’d like to
    Whisper, “Brian, I love you.”

    I’d love to show you how,
    My life is changed, and wow!
    When I’m all at odds,
    I needn’t turn to gods
    In a sweet, low voice I just need to
    Whisper, “Brian, I love you.”

    When I need someone to turn to,
    I just turn to imaginary you.
    When I want to cry and whine,
    I talk to you, within my mind.

    When I feel the need to declare
    “Yes, Brian, there is love here!”
    I try to sound simple and wise
    And say “I love you” with my eyes.

    But late at night when I should sleep
    Instead your company I keep
    I tell you, “Brian, love is true!”
    You say, “Kristen, I love you.”
    I say, “What you want I’ll give
    I’ll find us a place to live
    I’ll work hard and not spend much
    If I can spend life in your touch
    I’ll be nice and not complain
    I’ll be sweet and calm and sane
    When you’re sad and can’t go forth,
    I’ll show you your shining worth
    You’re worth the world, the sun, the sky
    Your art surely indicates why
    You’re worth every word I know
    You’re worth cold rain, sleet and snow
    I’ll face all these, constant and true,
    Because, Brian, I love, love you.”

    Sometimes I hate my life.
    You’ve chosen your new wife
    It’s not me, not me,
    Never, ever, can it be
    Still the clawing urge is to
    Tell you, “Brian, I love you!”




    Submitted on 2006-05-01 03:44:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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