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    dots Submission Name: Foreign Landdots

    Author: zadhoevlhu13
    ASL Info:    18/f/phil
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 97/94/25
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Maybe, the subject would be a bit confusing but some background would help, I guess... I wrote this poem when me and my parents were arguing about being young, about the youths of today.. Why can't they understand. They were once young, weren't they?

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    dotsForeign Landdots

    Even for once in your life
    Try to hear what the wind says
    Do not think twice to fly your mind
    To the new land you're stepping on

    Stop being hesitant and go
    We have debated long enough
    You will find out sooner or later
    This same land had been once a bliss

    Admit that you cannot stop
    The world from turning round
    And the time from running still
    To this place you used to love

    You know that everything changes
    You're already grown enough to know
    But not too old to be out of place
    To this foreign land you dare not to see.

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      This is a great piece of poetry and one which I enjoyed reading...and a lot for that matter. I think a poem works best if it just comes to you and is not forced. This is a fine example, great write, no critism from me. Have a nice day.
    | Posted on 2004-05-23 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Great structure and flow, alot of meaning in the content of your poem, I enjoyed it.


    Latin King.
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]

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