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    dots Submission Name: some shitdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotssome shitdots
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    we represent the A.R.K., so wussup/
    you need to watch your mouth, or get slapped the fuck up/
    I was polite til beef was started over air forces/
    now that dude dead, even the killa remorces/
    the coffin is closed, that dude was shot in the head/
    it took one shot, he wasn't bled till'he dead/
    whats sad, is that this shit really happened/
    this ain't hip hop, I"m rappin/
    facts from the sad and true/
    and some disrespect would get me mad at you/





    Submitted on 2006-05-01 21:18:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Most parts didn't flow and some parts didn't make sense...


    "he wasn't bled till'he dead"

    "this ain't hip hop, I"m rappin"
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by shmurr | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah this one was pretty bad. those lines that shmurr picked out were kinda weird. or maybe just worded them wrong.
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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