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I know Its Her


Author: POETRY
ASL Info:    17/f/az
Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 259 /141 /37
Words: 187
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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This I wrote a couple of weeks ago to a guy named Eric. Eric I know I am stupid for not letting you go....emotionally and for that forgive me but here just a poem to show you how I feel. I am truly sorry.


I know Its Her



How can you love someone after so long,
The feelings you once felt shouldn't they be gone?
I thought my feelings for you would eventually subside
But ever since you left with her....apart of me inside has died.

I can't sleep at night
I just picture us not together and in my mind it just doesn't seem right.
This might seem selfish of me to want you all to myself
I just keep reminding myself of these feelings that I have felt.

I know your with her and I just have to live with it,
But I want you to know I'll remember every minute
Since we were first together
Just promise me you'll remember me...forever.

Shes won your heart fair and square
And I am nothing to compare
You love her and not me
And that is just a thought I have to let be.

I know I have no right to say what I am going to say
But I am and I will everyday.
I love you and I always will
Because this is just the way I feel.




Submitted on 2006-05-01 23:58:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really liked this poem. It made me think about someone in my past who I just couldn't let go of either. I really like the line about not being able to sleep because you are picturing you guys not together. That is soemthing that I think everyone can relate to at some point in there life.
| Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by Kelly17 | [ Reply to This ]
  hey chick,
I really liked this piece by you and I added it to my favorites list... Eric seemed like your only guy that you ever have loved, I can inderstand what that's like and I hope that your getting along with it okay, thank's for the comment that you left me...

Love ya,
Lizzie
| Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Christina i really liked the poem and i'm srry for what i did...but tell ya the truth nicole and you would get along cause you and her a really alot alike you both have a great personality and everything and you both like the same thing i think too...but all i'm saying is i'm srry for doing that to you all of ussudden but i just couldn't wait that long and we were just to far apart...and even though i'm happier than i ever was it still hurts to know that i hurt you this much cause i never wanted to do that...expecially to you or any girl, but if you can call my # some time...its still the same we can talk again...and my gf would like to talk to you too cause she said she wants to get to know my first love cause she says you seem really cool and all...well i better go don't want to talk your ear off so...

ttyl,
Eric
| Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey
I liked this piece but there was only one slight prob and that was the rhythm seemed to come and go... rhymin myself and felt is a bit risky but cos its you we'll let you off ;)
i just had to re-read a few parts to get back on track.
Nice write though but you know you got talent
:)
John

Hope you take this as purely a critique and not a diss in any way

| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
  I actually liked this piece. At first I wasn't sure what I was getting into after reading the description. However I gave it a chance and wow. I can totally relate. Its harsh when the one that we love goes a different path. It's more of a subtraction when added up there is no math. Only the aftermath of pain, of being seperated. With a degree of pain for measured out. With the part that we are no longer about. As I read your piece. I think of my connection that I once enjoyed. Only to the cold blade of being severed. Ouch a part of me gone only lives on in memory. All in all good pome, certainly with a hi degree.

Sincerly Gannondalf aka Big Bear
| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]


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