Caress like silk
Choked to death
with a liquid kiss
| Hmmm...short, simple...and different, definitely. It's got an unique flow, and it just kind of...moves.|
I don't really know what else to say...
|| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ] || hmmm....and i thought this was gonna be about soap. |
sorry, couldn't resist (i'm SUCH a smart-ass). i do think this is good. i like the way it flows from one stanza to the next and the rhyme and near-rhyme works very well. nice work.
|| Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ] |