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Pink Liquid

Author: Oracle
ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423 /313 /46
Words: 22
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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you tell me.....

Pink Liquid

Slipping, slither

Shimmer, glimmer

Caress like silk
voluptuous lips

Choked to death
with a liquid kiss

Submitted on 2006-05-02 00:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmm...short, simple...and different, definitely. It's got an unique flow, and it just kind of...moves.

I don't really know what else to say...

| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm....and i thought this was gonna be about soap.

sorry, couldn't resist (i'm SUCH a smart-ass). i do think this is good. i like the way it flows from one stanza to the next and the rhyme and near-rhyme works very well. nice work.


| Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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