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    dots Submission Name: Pink Liquiddots
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    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 1290
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    Bytes: 196



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    dotsPink Liquiddots
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    Slipping, slither
    slide....

    Shimmer, glimmer
    glide....

    Caress like silk
    voluptuous lips

    Choked to death
    with a liquid kiss




    Submitted on 2006-05-02 00:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm...short, simple...and different, definitely. It's got an unique flow, and it just kind of...moves.

    I don't really know what else to say...

    Kassandra
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm....and i thought this was gonna be about soap.


    sorry, couldn't resist (i'm SUCH a smart-ass). i do think this is good. i like the way it flows from one stanza to the next and the rhyme and near-rhyme works very well. nice work.

    peace,

    joe
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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