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    dots Submission Name: Almost prettydots
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    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 796
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1206



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       this is a song by the conversation and I love it and thought I would share it! If you want to hear it then buy the album!


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    dotsAlmost prettydots
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    So tell me all the secrets
    youd never tell
    and wash away the name
    that you used to wear so well
    you're crying out for help
    its never ever there
    shes almost pretty
    but no one seems to care

    And I heard her say
    shes never been alone
    and she scared of all the places
    she's never gone

    And wash away your name
    with the tears
    that you have saved
    its not the effort
    you just never knew your way

    So keep your distance
    from the fears that you create
    your falling faster
    than you think your heart can take

    Always quiet cuz she speechless
    in her way
    she always quiet
    until the conversation ends

    And I heard her say
    shes never been alone
    and she scared of all the places
    she's never gone

    And wash away your name
    with the tears
    that you have saved
    its not the effort
    you just never knew your way

    I used to love to sit
    and watch her sleep
    almost pretty
    she beautiful to me




    Submitted on 2006-05-02 01:49:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i really liked this.
    reminded me of myself kind of.
    haha.
    you know you're narcissistic when.
    its actually kinda similar to the poem that i JUST posted.
    just in the way that they both have the word secrets in them...
    but, back to business, i really enjoyed this, kind of reminded me of a death cab song.

    <333


    (oh, and a personal preferences of mine is just spelling out cause rather than cuz, etc. i just think it takes away from the beauty of the piece.)
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]


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