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Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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just another poem that's just another view point of ur feelings


Pretending to be something we're not-
Dressing up the way society wants us to see.
The one's who "dare"-the one's who be themselves-
Are said to be outside the lines of societies' verity!

We smile 'cause others around us smile.
Believing what others want us to believe.
Afraid to retort at everyone's approval-
We accept their 'wrongs' and stay at relief!

Criticizing everyone that pass us
Saying out loud Lucipher's verses of mockery!
It's time to stop being cynical...
It's time to judge one's soul, one's inner beauty!

Hate "hatred"...
And believe in "equality".
"Be" yourself...
And let others be!

Submitted on 2006-05-02 07:01:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Dude, nice one. Tell me honestly, am I not 'original'? Do I really care about what others think? DO I?! Cuz I don't think I give a damn about what they say I look like or stuff like that. I get dissed everyday from some stuff or the other! (Usually, it's the results that I got, and I guess they're jealous!)
| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]

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