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Here With Me

Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 163
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Inspired by a movie (starring D.J. Qualls) and i don't know the name. if somebody does pleeze lemme know....
express ur feelings

Here With Me

I fell in love with you at "Hi!".
Soon it was me calling you at 3am saying "Love you, bye!".
It felt like we were meant for each other...
Destined to be together...
Now, I wish it had lasted forever.

We had fun by running away from home-
We ran away to a different city.
Regardless of the dangers we stood up to...
It just seemed fun-lasting till eternity!

It really hurt me to know, you had an incurable sickness!
Meaning you could die today or years later...
But you'd have to leave me none the less!

It hurt now, hurts so bad!
To not have you beside me!
I thought I could handle it-
But I'm drenched in tears and it's not been easy.

I know I can never move on-
Never love somedbody else...
'Cause you're still walking this lonely road with me-
Still going to church with me, on the sound of those merry bells!

Submitted on 2006-05-02 07:13:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  :S! I'm confused! Let's hope nobody dies. I personally think it's better that they are alive and not with you rather than they are dead! The opening stanza is simply superb...!
| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]

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