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    dots Submission Name: My Homedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is a little doodle I did soon after my husband and I married. Its nothing special and its shorter than I usually write now, but I like it nonetheless.


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    dotsMy Homedots
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    In all the houses around the world,
    Mine is blessed most of all.
    Wonderful stories would be told,
    If you could hear these walls.

    Love and laughs prosper here,
    Hard times come and go,
    But nothing can spoil the family bond,
    Created in my home.

    The life we live day in and out,
    In my happy little home,
    Will never be forgotten for the walls,
    Will remember even after I've gone.




    Submitted on 2006-05-02 10:51:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice little poem. Sweet in tone without being too maudlin. You should print it up and mount it on the wall. My only suggestion for change would be in the 2nd stanza:

    Love and laughter prospers here,
    Hard times come and go,
    But nothing can spoil the family bond
    created in my home.

    Feel free to use it or lose it.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you mean Glassy Eyed. I get tired of all poems being about depression, suicide and things of that nature. I enjoy writing what makes me smile, or what I know will put me in a good mood when I read it. Though I do go through times where I write some mean angst poems. But they aren't what I dwell on in all my poems. Thanks for the compliment
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really sweet, I liked it. Such a great relief from all the teen angsty poems and depressed stuff on here. Nice job, made me want to get married sooner.

    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      awww, this was adorable, you and your husband sound like such a perfect couple. I hope you enjoy your new home, it's so nice to share something so important! The format was neat, you had no grammatical errors and the rhyming shceme, well I'll give it an eight which is good. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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