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    dots Submission Name: Love Can't Disappeardots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 485
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    Bytes: 871



    Description:
       This was written a very long time ago. My first love had cheated on me, and after I met my husband now, I realized what real love was and how crazy I was to have thought I could have ever loved the dumper. Enjoy.


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    dotsLove Can't Disappeardots
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    Of all the things that could happen,
    To ruin a life so grand,
    Deception is the worst disaster,
    When caused by a loved one's hand.

    You left me for your mistress,
    But that isn't what tears me apart.
    Its the fact that you lied for so long,
    That really breaks my heart.

    You kept your secret for so long,
    While pretending to want me still.
    A future wrecked in such little time.
    Actions and words could kill.

    Lying here recalling the last week.
    Wondering if it was my fault you cheated.
    I realized our love was never real,
    And that is had never depleated.

    Love can't disappear over night,
    There isn't a such thing as falling out,
    You are either in love or not
    There should never be any doubt.




    Submitted on 2006-05-02 13:46:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW! powerful. Very full of emotion and very powerful! powerful, powerful,powerful, powerful, powerful,powerful, powerful, powerful, powerful,powerful.
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      i can relate to this poem so extremely that i nearly teared up when i read it. the flow was good for the first half but seemed to fade after a few paragraphs...but the emotion was expressed clearly but rationally and i liked this piece a lot.
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]
      Like I said in my description, this was written a long time ago. My writing skills have matured a little since I wrote this one I agree it needs work. Maybe soon I will rewrite it and see what I come up with. Thanks for the feed back.
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a little plain but over all good...maybe you should add a little more description or some true feeling emotions....don't get me wrong, i think it is good and has a great flow...
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
      girl i cant even begin to tell you how dearly i can relate to this write,pain from the one you love doing such a wicked thing can destroy anyone,belive me...........please review some of my work and tell me what you think
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by thehiddenone | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely written! I can relate from a males point of view! Like the first few stanza! Keep up the excellent work peace & stay say my child (lol)
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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