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    dots Submission Name: Hurtdots

    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A dead end realtionship where only sex is what is important to this guy,not true love.
    He don't know what it is.

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    What am I suposed to do,
    Our love just isn't true,
    I know you act like you care,
    About me more then I care for you,

    But God is leading me,
    and my life,
    Getting rid of restless nights and
    Mistakes I wish I could make right,

    I think of you often,
    In my dreams,
    Awake or asleep,
    Wondering what if this could have been,

    But you won't even start out as,
    Just a freind,
    You want more then what I can give you,
    Love is not enough,

    My heart is breaking more everytime,
    We touch,
    It's tearing me up inside,
    No longer can I hide the tears,
    I have cryed,

    It just hurts me to much,
    Why can't you understand,
    That I feel like I am in quike sand,
    Everything is just to fast,
    That's how I know this would never last,

    Your always bring up the past,
    Not looking to God,
    And letting go of what has been,
    You bring it up all over again,

    I want to live my life,
    without fears or strife,
    No more knifes to my heart,
    Even if this breaks our freindship apart,
    I'll just make a new start,

    I wish you the best of all,
    And hope you let God in you heart,
    So he can make you strong,
    In faith,and in his word,

    He is number one in my life,
    Thats how I can let go,
    Of all the troubles,
    and strife in my life,

    I am starting out new,
    But what you do with your life,
    Is your choice,
    And completly up tp you.

    But one day I hope you understand,
    What love is all about,
    Cause the Idea of love you have,
    Is not true love, its not from God above
    It is only lust,

    And thats not the worce part,
    Its how I belived you cared,
    And knew how true love is shared.

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      Once again, you have a great nack for passion. I'm not too much of a beliver myself, so in my mind you said god too much. But it works, you get your one true point across because it is you belief. And on your last stanza, I think you meant worse instead of worce?
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]

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