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    dots Submission Name: Smooth Talkerdots

    Author: Cigarz
    ASL Info:    35/M/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 258/183/50
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1296
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 209

       Playing somewhat with linebreaks here. I'd like to pair down the last line, but then again, not a major issue.

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    dotsSmooth Talkerdots

    A scrambling colossus,
    thick and perilously internal,
    finds a lonely synapse mulling
    over consequences of fruition.
    With a cataclysm, they
    meet to become a mouthful of honey.

    Submitted on 2006-05-02 19:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really interesting
    I keep reading this write back to myself trying to find the perfect meaning
    Ive finally come to the conclussuin this write
    Speaks of ones life and their search for love and after finding it they finally find themself at peace
    Great Job with this
    This definately made me think
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I can dig it. I think it's the fifth line that's letting it down, the first four are excellent, and the punch line is fine.
    "With a cataclysm" doesn't light my wick for some reason, Todd, I can think of many ways to go, tis up to you.

    Nice little idea.

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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