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    dots Submission Name: angel dream and demon wishdots
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    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsangel dream and demon wishdots
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    angels dream of demons danceing
    just like demons dream of angels wings
    everyone whats what they cant have
    thats why life is so damn sad

    angels in their heavenly home
    wish for the freedom thats not their own
    while they sit on cloud made throwns
    they wish for just a moment
    to join the demons in fire lit dance

    demons forever band from home
    to to dwell in darkness all alone
    wish again to have angels wings
    just for one last glance of heaven




    Submitted on 2006-05-03 14:51:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey there, I just want to fix some of your spelling errors to make this poem extra great. First of all, when adding 'ing' to a word that ends with e, you take the e away, so it's dancing* not danceing. My bf does that all the time... it pisses the hell out of me. I think in line 3 you meant 'everyone wants* what they can't have' and in the 3rd stanza you repeated to. Lol sorry, okay, I like the theme of this, and how you used angels to make the contrast stronger, reather than the typical like 'the brunettes all wish they were blonde' hehe.. it's a lot deeper because you're talking about personality! I absolutely love the 2nd stanza and the image of the angels so beautiful in their cloud throwns glaring down at the rebellious dancing divas in hell.. hahahaha... it's so lovely and ironic. So sad though, there is nothing you can do about it... poor angels, poor demons. Poor everyone for god's sake it's just not fair!!!

    Sorry, I think I might of read into this too deeply >.< Lol. Cheers........

    ~eL
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by Pink:.DragonFly | [ Reply to This ]


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