Wow.. perfectly captured the feeling of being alone, having to view everyone else with the one's they love and the ones who love them. you are mistaken though.. for you see, EVERYONE loves the one in the middle. You don't have the luxury of holding ONE person and loving ONE person who loves YOU alone, but you are loved by many... and you must open your eyes to the love in the smiles that seems so hidden to you. Oh my dearest, you know I care the world for you, you know I never say anything I don't mean. And while I have another, I will never forget my love for you... Remember that always, and don't give up hope of finding YOUR ONE AND ONLY, because i swear to you, she'll find you when you least expect it.
Awww this is so sad......You know what I feel the exact way sometimes well basically all the time it except I am a girl....which is different But anyways I loved this poem. It describes just the way I feel! Its going on my faves. Take care of yourself. k? -Christina aka POETRY
aww i feel like that at like that every school dance when i see my ex girlfriend and when i see all my friends looking into each others eyes and just wanna die....The smile haunts a burning reminder There is no one for the one in the middle. wow i loved that part...im not sure what the middle part is really about but still it was amazing im adding this to my favriots (the fifth ever...)
Who is in the friggin middle??? I liked the structure of this piece but dam if I can figger it out. Guess I am just too stoopid. Anywho, the flow was good and the metre decent. Metaphorically lacking although. I feel the emotion so your point got through, well done there.
basically, a decent piece, not the best I have read on this subject, but not bad.