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    dots Submission Name: The Unloveddots
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    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 980
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 954



    Description:
       In this poem I'm the one in the middle. I'm always helping people in their love lives when I don't have one myself. It's lonely and painful. But for some reason I continue on.


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    Surrounded by couples,
    dancing their lives away in
    eachother's arms.

    Standing in the middle,
    with no one to hold,
    no one to call my own.

    Someone falls from their lover's arms
    She is saved from her demise,
    by the one in the middle.

    Staring into the eyes of the fair face
    Wondering how someone so fair
    even started to fall.

    Shake off the love I felt for that brief moment.
    Helping her back into the arms
    of the one she loves.

    She turns and gives me a smile.
    A kind smile, but not a loving smile.
    For no one loves the one in the middle.

    The smile haunts
    a burning reminder
    There is no one for the one in the middle.

    The dance continues
    Everyone stares deep into the
    eyes of their lover.
    No one loves the one in the middle.




    Submitted on 2006-05-03 19:32:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow.. perfectly captured the feeling of being alone, having to view everyone else with the one's they love and the ones who love them. you are mistaken though.. for you see, EVERYONE loves the one in the middle. You don't have the luxury of holding ONE person and loving ONE person who loves YOU alone, but you are loved by many... and you must open your eyes to the love in the smiles that seems so hidden to you. Oh my dearest, you know I care the world for you, you know I never say anything I don't mean. And while I have another, I will never forget my love for you... Remember that always, and don't give up hope of finding YOUR ONE AND ONLY, because i swear to you, she'll find you when you least expect it.
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by CutMeDeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      ...How sad..To be caught in the middle..It's really got the emotion in it. I can say I can relate. Loved these lines:

    The smile haunts
    a burning reminder
    There is no one for the one in the middle.

    Keep up. Take care.^_^
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww this is so sad......You know what I feel the exact way sometimes well basically all the time it except I am a girl....which is different But anyways I loved this poem. It describes just the way I feel! Its going on my faves. Take care of yourself. k?
    -Christina aka POETRY
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so sad. for some one like me who never lacked in dates this makes me want to say here you take her she's all yours. i always had a girl on my arm where ever i was.

    you did a good job bringing out the emotional aspects. i can only guess the one in the middle must be you.
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww, this is so sad! I hope you're not the one stuck in the middle... if you are I hope some girl comes and sweeps you off your feet so you'll no longer be stuck there in the evil middle!
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
       aww i feel like that at like that every school dance when i see my ex girlfriend and when i see all my friends looking into each others eyes and just wanna die....The smile haunts
    a burning reminder
    There is no one for the one in the middle.
    wow i loved that part...im not sure what the middle part is really about but still it was amazing im adding this to my favriots (the fifth ever...)

    Trevor.../...
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      Who is in the friggin middle??? I liked the structure of this piece but dam if I can figger it out. Guess I am just too stoopid. Anywho, the flow was good and the metre decent. Metaphorically lacking although. I feel the emotion so your point got through, well done there.

    basically, a decent piece, not the best I have read on this subject, but not bad.

    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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