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    dots Submission Name: blue moondots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsblue moondots
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    stormy skies
    reflect the feeling
    in the air
    tonight, alone
    wreathed in the
    streaming
    pearlescent light
    the tops of trees
    bathed in the
    soft pale hue
    like the inside
    of my heart
    they too are blue




    Submitted on 2006-05-03 20:40:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very good poem... nice flow... I liked how you made some parts rhyme. The imagery was very good too... it made me feel at peace; it was just that calm. I'm not sure if this is the way you wanted the poem to appear to people, but this is just how it appeared to be to me.
    Nice write, keep it up.

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by Lavender | [ Reply to This ]


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