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    dots Submission Name: Tea Dance (Where has the inspriration gone?)dots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       was just thinking I cant think of anything to write and this dribbled out...


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    dotsTea Dance (Where has the inspriration gone?)dots
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    Tease me like a tealeaf
    through a perforated hole
    and brew me a fresh one.

    I am parched for inspiration,
    drained of creativity.

    Strain me out
    a bag of new flavours
    of blends never titilated
    on tastebuds ever before.

    Pour out a spout
    of flowing fluidity
    as I sip at chaos.

    Let's have a tea dance
    while the doormouse sleeps on.




    Submitted on 2006-05-04 08:02:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi Kate,

    Your little tea dance makes a fine write. Now while the mouse is sleeping the muse speaks, now doesn't she?

    Hope your life is grand and you're finding time to write now and then. Thanks for sharing this one and keeping your muse at heart.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one. There is nothong much to say about it, in relation to critique. But I just felt like letting you know, how much I appriciated this write.

    All the best,
    -tZar
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by tZar | [ Reply to This ]
      I can so relate to this! This was very good to say you just thought of it while feeling you were plum out of ideas. This was writeen so well. The imagery of how the tea compared to your writing abilities was a perfect touch. And the analogies was on spot as well. This is a fav for me.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      You really made one heck of a write out of no inspiration
    I really liked the analogy
    This is fantastic
    I wish I could come up with such good writes when I have nothing in my mind
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      One of my favorite subjects to write about is lack of inspiration, and often the best stuff comes from it. I loved the tea bag analogy and I really enjoyed the image of a "tea dance" and the reference to Alice's doormouse. A writer often does feel "strained out."
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by JAvery | [ Reply to This ]
      For having a lack of insperation you sure did a great job. I love the tea analogy! This is a very clever piece about wanting something to write about but it seems to me that even in a dry spell your writing doesn't suffer. I often feel this way but I've never looked at it as wanting new flavors of tea. This a great poem. You did a fine job.
    - -Oli
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]


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