Isn't it crazy how things used to be? Where razorblades were the coolest things since ice cream? Man, it makes you think...how we have changed...how aspects have changed... how... we are someone completely different--so, who were we then?
since i read this last my viewpoint has changed...i love this...it makes me sad adn makes me think...this is getting personal but i dont give a flying [censored] really...everytime i start thinking like really deep on [censored], i get depressed and just get like a tingling sensation on my wrists and suddnely have the urge to cut my [censored] hands off and just die...i just want to die, then i just grab my wrists and i turn my head all fast like to get rid of the thought...this is the one for me...soemthing i think i would do someday but im gonna make myself not do it.
i liked it a lot the whole thing of it being compared to art is creepy but awesome still...this is really forlorn-ish...i can picture a whole scene being played out in my mind as i read it...great to see another one from ya!!!!
i loved the emotion showe din this one. when you said in the last stanza ""I love you" she whispered "dont leave me" he cried and there in his arms is where she died..." i do have to say that was not orginal, everyone uses that and i believe that your emotion was not unique in that stanza. but other than that the words flowed gracefully and the theme was wonderful. keep up the good work. take care courtney
This is a pretty good write I like the emotion you spoke of But I would definately say this write speaks more of obsession then love I found this to be very sad that one can live there life for another Good Job with this God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
make sure you have to apostrophe's where there needed, holy crap this is great, was lookin thru my faves list saw your name and thought i'd look, guess i know why i had added you before, your friggin awesome, i love this other than in like the first stanza where theres an apo... can't spell that missing its great, hell with that missing its great. Good write ~Vynom
I also think that your poem in some way shows how the girl is finally separating herself from everyone else and kind of like discovering herself. (maybe separating herself from him???) Not sure but it kind of came to me in that way.
Hello Dark, it's unicorn poet. I know i haven't been around lately. Sorry to have missed your recent happiness...
As always i love your work, you never fail to make it real in my mind. Very good. i have to agree with ron on how sad it is that one can live their life for another..... but we all go through some form of this very thing in our own lives.... trying to find our true identity, all the while having our very identity being wrapped up in someone else's lives. I look forward to taking the time to read all your newest works. I've sure missed a lot of great new stuff on elite.
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