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    dots Submission Name: Walk away girldots
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    Author: jslbabygirl101
    ASL Info:    18/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 76/82/49
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 123
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 532



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    dotsWalk away girldots
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    she walks away from the crowd;
    never looking back,
    for the whole world to see her crying loud;
    a life is what they lack.

    They don't know what runs through her head;
    each ad every day,
    they laugh adn poke fun making her wish she were dead;
    when they have nothing left to say.

    She walks away head drooping low;
    her heart and soul have been crushed,
    with nothig left to show;
    she walks her slowest away from there without any rush.




    Submitted on 2006-05-04 13:20:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good. Improve the flow, and try to explain more about the girl and not just what happens to her. Overall, this was really nice.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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