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    dots Submission Name: The Riverdots
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    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    dotsThe Riverdots
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    In the beginning God made the heavens and the earth.
    On this earth he created the lands,and oceans, rivers and seas, plants and the animals.
    Then he created me.
    A life down a road less taken by the world is a journey I've gone through.
    Many heartaches and pains. I've seen and caused but never meant to.
    I asked God to send someone that my heart can run to,
    And then I looked up and in my suprise there stood you.
    Someone that would be there through the rain.
    The person that cleared the skies by just saying my name.
    Time I use to spend lying down and sheading tears,
    Is now spent with you throwing away all of my fears.
    I knew you were sent by God when I looked into your eyes.
    Because they twinkled like the bright stars in the night strucken skies.
    There is a place where the water flows,
    And this place were feelings are shown,
    for this is a river of my tears. Caused by the world bringing all of my fears.
    No longer is the river filled with pain, sorrow, and thoughts of being sad.
    But now it is filled with the tears of joy, happiness, and the memories we will soon have.




    Submitted on 2006-05-04 15:07:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is lovely. Again written with emotion and real love. This person you write about must be central in your heart. I enjoyed reading this.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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