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    dots Submission Name: Thinking About Youdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThinking About Youdots
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    How can I live knowing that you are not here?
    Dreaming about the moment that you return to me,
    Just watching the nights leave one by one lonely,
    You act like nothing happened but me thinking about you.

    You know I just can't move on,
    I still miss you kissing me,
    of your gestures I am stuck on,
    I don't think I can take it,
    I know you already left me,
    That you already forgot me,
    But how do I do it to be able to let you go,
    How do I do it, if I can't live without you,
    I really need you, please come back to me,
    Since you left me, I can't go and fall asleep,
    Forgot to live.

    How can I live knowing that you are not here?
    Dreaming about the moment that you return to me,
    Just watching the nights leave one by one lonely,
    You act like nothing happened but me thinking about you.

    How to do it if you are not besides me?
    I keep growing more desperate,
    You left my heart broken,
    dont you see that I need you here,
    Not having you is making me crazy,
    My life seems to be stopping,
    Please come back because my world is ending,
    Thinking about you here.

    How can I live knowing that you are not here?
    Dreaming about the moment that you return to me,
    Just watching the nights leave one by one lonely,
    You act like nothing happened but me thinking about you




    Submitted on 2006-05-04 15:07:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aw, pobrecito, que triste pero que dulce a la vez...

    This was nice, very sweet, and it's very refreshing to see a man not afraid to show his true feelings. That, to me, makes a real man, being able to say what is in his heart, and not what he wants to portray to everyone else to make himself seem stronger than he is.

    I love the repitition, it helps the reader see how you really feel, as I already stated. I think if I was the girl that this was written for, I would have dropped everything and ran right back to you because the love here is so obvious.

    As Lorna said, as time passes, the pain begins to go away, maybe not fully as you would want it to, but it begins to hurt less as you go through life knowing that you deserve better and are better off.

    Ten cuidado, vaya con la frente en alto. Keep your chin up. ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very sweet expression of your feelings. You have really done a nice job explaining this kind of painful feeling and sense of loss. Losing someone you love is never easy especially when they leave and you still love them. Letting go is so hard to do and they leave you without a choice. It doesnt seem fair, it seems as if the pain will never go away, but it does. It gets easier with time. I have been there before and I know how you feel. It sucks. But, as time passes you will realize that you deserve better anyway and you are better off. I always say, better to find out sooner than later and waste more of your life with someone who doesnt deserve your love. You just need to give it some time and you will see. Life can really suck at times but for every door that closes, another one opens. Hang in there.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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