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    dots Submission Name: Deathly Galedots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDeathly Galedots
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    Straining silence fills the air,
    Endless sky a gash, a tear,
    A hole at day, the whole at night,
    The wind it cries out in afright,
    It shreiks to look into that light.

    A jarring monotone,
    And in it a groan,
    It leers and jeers,
    Laughs and cries,
    It screams up to those boundless skies.

    It rips and rends all those people,
    All of them up in the steeple,
    With yells like blades thru the air,
    Then back it flies into it's lair.




    Submitted on 2006-05-04 15:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by shmurr | [ Reply to This ]


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