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    dots Submission Name: A Reck less Souldots
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    Author: takenspiritwind
    ASL Info:    21/F/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 117/95/38
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This poem is a rewrite of a previous poem that the title was mispelled and so i redid the whole thing. I think there could be more...any advice would very much appreciated. Thank you!


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    dotsA Reck less Souldots
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    A reck less and unforgiving soul of unleashed hell
    rages upon my spirit,
    alone in the dark I sing a song of sorrow not knowing
    who will hear it.
    For the best I am locked away for my trivial and useless crimes committed,
    I know for sure that the severity of what I did would not be acquitted.
    And now so alone I weep in my darkened prison of unforgiveable fate,
    I do not protest all that is unkind and tears roll down my battered face of hate.
    I know what I did was wrong...of course so wrong by all measures of the human mind,
    but now why am I punished when others do the same and I'm the only one they find.
    So now day and night I try to think of the answer to a question that I was asked,
    but the harder I try to think of why...I killed the man...the reason reamains masked.




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      its funny how we get to a place in our minds when you just start writing ansd something so strange but meaningful just starts to appear from our minds straight to the paper. Your imagery in this was superb seeing you with a blank look a wondering spirit and a tear falling in the corner of your cell singing i could hear the words of the song thats how much im feeling the poem. I always ask myself what it would be like to be in the mind of someone that murdered a person what they thought of how that rage brought them to do something so inhumane. The malice that built up and the feeling after they killed that person i bet those feelings would be all over the place. You brought me there with your poem just how u was singing not knowing who is listening you wrote this not knowing who would read. it is an original piece that is for sure and it is very well written im glad i crossed your path. Ill be back for more.
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]


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