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    dots Submission Name: I realized too Latedots
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    Author: POETRY
    ASL Info:    17/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 259/141/37
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1350
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 437



    Description:
       Another one for the guy who broke my heart.....


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    dotsI realized too Latedots
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    I realized too late that you loved me
    I realized too late that with me is where you longed to be.

    I realized too late that your love was true
    I realized too late that I wanted to be with you too

    I realized too late that that you cared
    I realized too late that you were actually there

    I realized too late that I loved you
    Now itís me longing to be with you




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      Hey Christina this one is wonderful. I liked the way it all just kinda flowed together into one. Keep writing awsome ones!

    Love ya, Phil
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Darkestlove | [ Reply to This ]
      Honey!!!!!!! You did it up Oh my goodness I know exactly how you feel, Girl that junk is not fair it makes you look back and think man. He's gone.
    Wonderful, no correction beautifully written poem
    ~Rene'~
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by soaring eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      awww that sux. the poem was good . the situation sucked. so ur finally ready to be with'this guy and he's nowhere to be found. that's awful. this is going on my fave. it's so simple but so easy to relate to.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked that third line the most it was just nice to read

    the second part well second line did not read very smoothly i think you could probly change around a few words

    and the ending first line i think its kinda repetive maybe? i am not sure but i think that
    the ending is line is also a little out of place but it really puts a nice twist on to the whole thing

    Nice job

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was really good. My favorite part was

    "I realized too late that I love you
    Now it's me longing to be with you"

    I love that part. And so many times, you see a friend and you think of that person as just a friend, not knowing that sometimes, they may love you. And when youo finally do find out, it's too late, they already moved on, and now you are the person, sitting and waiting for the other person to love you back. ok, im done.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      "I realized too late that that you cared
    I realized too late that you were actually there"

    It's all good, but thats my favorite part.
    I love it.

    Very nicely done

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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