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    dots Submission Name: Withered Flowersdots

    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWithered Flowersdots

    So lifeless and so still,
    so motionless and grave,
    the flowers lay among old books
    and caught the sullen wave.

    So dark upon the shores there loomed
    a form so monstrous black
    and speeding with the salty gust,
    the foaming waters on his track.

    Where are the sultry summer nights
    when rapture hovered like thin smoke,
    tell me where I can find the frost
    upon the winter's slumb'ring dream.

    Oh flowers withered, shrunken, old,
    tell me where are the tears I shed,
    that night when all was dark, and stars
    were dancing on the murky lake?

    Submitted on 2006-05-04 21:41:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      like a flower we are told to be beutiful, but stands the hard trails like that flower you described. many see it as a task of life with no reason to go on or a task that has no will worthwild outcome. how you take it and answer back determines your fate. need to chat, holla if not I pray that all comes to a light for you. peace
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]

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