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    dots Submission Name: Just Listendots
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    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
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    dotsJust Listendots
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    I'm screaming, but you don't hear me
    I'm jumping, but it's as if you don't see me
    I'm crying ,but your not here to wipe my tears away,
    just listen.
    I'm angry, but you don't care
    Even though you promised: your never there
    I'm in pain, but you won't even dare
    Just listen.
    I'm sorry, but what did I do
    Your suppose to take care of me, but you never come through
    Look at me, so you can see that I'm true
    Just listen.
    I'm so tired of your misleading ways
    Your bringing darkenss into my enlightened days
    Daddy, the one thing that I pray, Is that you Just listen!




    Submitted on 2006-05-05 08:43:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I found this to be very evocative and heartbreaking. Very sad and yet well written. Having two daughters myself, I relate to this very well.

    And yes, sometimes us dads hear, but don't listen.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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