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Author: Glassy Eyed
ASL Info:    17/f
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Class/Type: Poetry /
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This is a dream poem we had to write for school, based off a real dream.


I knew that he was leaving
As his eyes burned into mine
Begging me to understand
But I couldn't

The winter gray sky
Mirrored his stormy gray eyes.
The wind whipped me,
As his words stung my skin,
Leaving me a
Sick, twisted, bloody form,
That he turned from in horror.

I called out to him,
Begged him not to leave,
To understand that this wasn't my fault,
But that was a lie,
It was my fault,
I knew it,
In the depths of my being I knew it,
And there was nothing I could do about it.

Submitted on 2006-05-05 11:50:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like how the poem breaks down the emotions that are occuring. They really draw the reader in. You did a great job writing a poem that tells a whole story, in a few stanzas. I personally wouldn't change a thing, keep up the excellent work. :)

| Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]

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