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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1272
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       crap I know, wrote it listening to Nickelback of all things I need to get my hands on some Atreyu or Alice in Chains...Is In FLames anygood?

    Yeah um...this is continuous don't stop reading it almost as if it were prose then slow down at the word slow....complex classical musician stuff sry...


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    dotsTimedots
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    Time
    Time is insublime
    It's not the moving of it no
    it's the fact that it won't go
    Fast
    fast is getting lax
    not moving quick enough
    cuz life is getting tough
    Tough
    Tough is getting old
    like getting thrown into the cold
    Please just keep me warm
    I don't care if it's not norm
    Pain
    Pain is getting lame
    not enough for me to burst
    maybe that is why he cursed

    Control
    Control is going gone
    out the door
    like a whore
    or a sore
    out of time
    out of space
    out of life
    out of death

    Time
    Time isn insublime
    It's not the moving of it no
    it's the fact that it won't go
    Slow
    Slow as I begin to be free
    you'll see
    it's time I get the respect
    I expect
    from you
    from me
    from life, but
    we'll have to wait and see




    Submitted on 2006-05-05 11:53:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really powerful write
    I can easily see this write being matched to music to create one heck of a write
    You included all the feelings one goes thru in their lifetime which is not an easy task
    Great Job with this
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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