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Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 149
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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crap I know, wrote it listening to Nickelback of all things I need to get my hands on some Atreyu or Alice in Chains...Is In FLames anygood?

Yeah um...this is continuous don't stop reading it almost as if it were prose then slow down at the word slow....complex classical musician stuff sry...


Time is insublime
It's not the moving of it no
it's the fact that it won't go
fast is getting lax
not moving quick enough
cuz life is getting tough
Tough is getting old
like getting thrown into the cold
Please just keep me warm
I don't care if it's not norm
Pain is getting lame
not enough for me to burst
maybe that is why he cursed

Control is going gone
out the door
like a whore
or a sore
out of time
out of space
out of life
out of death

Time isn insublime
It's not the moving of it no
it's the fact that it won't go
Slow as I begin to be free
you'll see
it's time I get the respect
I expect
from you
from me
from life, but
we'll have to wait and see

Submitted on 2006-05-05 11:53:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a really powerful write
I can easily see this write being matched to music to create one heck of a write
You included all the feelings one goes thru in their lifetime which is not an easy task
Great Job with this
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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